Saturday, February 12, 2011

Group Essay

Hello group members. In my paragraph the only thing I changed was the second "chunk" because ya know I sorta mixed up the characters. I sorta need to spice up my thesis so anything you say would help. Thanks!

1 comment:

  1. alright i'm sorry I didn't comment earlier, i waited till seven then kind of gave up on your post...
    but yeah, you should just try to get a better thesis sentace, besides that, your paragraph is pretty strong

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